Tuesday, 13 October 2015

AS THE FLASHING LIGHTS CAME TOWARDS ME


One dark night my mom tucked me in and turned of the lights. I started dreaming I lived in a castle with my dog Flame and no mom to tell me to go to bed and no dad to tell me to do chores. since I was rich I decided to buy an x-box one and play it all night long. At 12:45 I went to bed with Flame I woke up in the middle of the night I saw ghosts zombies and a lot of bad things . I just realized something this no dream its a nightmare. At 2:00 I saw flashing towards me .

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  2. Hi Danzig! I really liked how you used descriptive words! I would probably give it a level 2+ or a level 3. You did not use alot of capitals at the beginning of your sentences and punctuation. Keep up the good work!

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  4. Hi Danzig! I really like your paragraph. I liked how you use descriptive words and some punctuation. Some advice I will give you is maybe put "as the flashing lights came towards me " in the beginning of the paragraph so I know what your talking about. Also maybe try to stay in the moment of when the " flashing lights came towards me" and talk about it more but otherwise it was great. Keep up the hard and great work!

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